Pruning Hedges: Editing for Confidence

When hedging gets in the way.

Old pruning shears on a worn wood table.

By Karen Yin • March 15, 2016

 

When a writing style comes across as uncertain or apologetic, look for hedge words. Also known as cautious language, hedge words have an important role in academic, technical, and legal writing, where responsible writers want to limit meaning. In writing that can be less precise, words such as sometimes, almost, and usually weaken prose, deflate conclusions, and raise doubts about the writer’s authority.

According to Joseph M. Williams in Style: Toward Clarity and Grace, hedges “give us room to backpedal and to make exceptions.” When mitigating becomes a tic, however, it serves the writer, not the reader. By freeing prose from this type of clutter, copyeditors can clarify the message and reveal its power.

Hedge words also include possibly, probably, partly, somewhat, maybe, might, perhaps, kind of, mostly, nearly, generally, could, and should—words that provide the writer a way out should claims be challenged.

If writers sometimesgenerally, and maybe everything, they will be right, but their work will be unreadable.

In The Sense of Style: The Thinking Person’s Guide to Writing in the 21st Century, Steven Pinker says, “There is an alternative slogan to Cover Your Anatomy: So Sue Me. A classic writer counts on the common sense and ordinary charity of [their] readers, just as in everyday conversation we know when a speaker means ‘in general’ or ‘all else being equal.’” If writers sometimes, generally, and maybe everything, they will be right, but their work will be unreadable. Even if sentences are driven by vivid verbs, habitual hedging renders prose lifeless—especially when paired with weak words, such as just, think (that), and try (to). Instead of “It appeared that writers had a tendency to hedge,” the same idea can be stated with “Most writers hedge,” or simply “Writers hedge.”

Martin Cutts wasn’t being dramatic when he gave the Oxford Guide to Plain English’s section on hedge words the title “Conquering Fear.” Pruning hedge words judiciously makes language direct and confident.

Karen has long wavy hair and is smiling into the camera. She's wearing a gray T-shirt and an aquamarine pendant.Karen Yin is the founder of Conscious Style Guide, a resource for inclusive, empowering, and respectful language, and AP vs. Chicago, an irreverent language blog for anyone who “gives a dollar sign, ampersand, exclamation point, and pound sign about style.” Winner of the 2017 Robinson Prize for furthering the craft of professional editing, Karen writes the style column for Copyediting and has given presentations on LGBTQ terminology, sexist language, racist language, and androgyny.

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Note: This article originally appeared in the August/September 2015 issue of Copyediting newsletter and is reproduced with permission from the Pilcrow Group. Photo by Yotoen used under CC BY 4.0.

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